Rubric Evaluation of Research Paper

By Sarah Moore

Re-reading my introduction, I'm not at all satisfied with the wording or general idea it's giving. I would say, based on the rubric in our syllabus, that my intro would either be a Weak (D) or Competent (C). My ideas are hard to follow based on how they're presented, and my argument is not very apparent. I really dislike my sentences, they seem really jumbled. The reason why I'm targeting my introduction is because it's one of the most important paragraphs, and since it's the very first thing my reader will see, it should be good and coherent. I think I can improve it by listing my subjects in order, using more examples, and making sure my writing flows well.

I feel like one thing that I have done well with, especially in my revision over the weekend, was adding more credible sources. There aren't necessary four in each paragraph, but there are definitely six to eight throughout, which could make my paper Strong (B). Improvements could be, however, to include more, and better connect them to my ideas.

My formatting has consistent flaws, so most likely that area is Competent (C). I have a strange habit of making all of my citations in the Works Cited page APA format, rather than the correct MLA format. There are also a few errors after I add credit to a quote I just paraphrased or quoted that I need to work on. I can hopefully bump my formatting up to a Strong (B) or Superior (A) by really studying helpful citation websites like purdue owl, or asking the help of a classmate.

Research essay Revision

By Sarah Daly


   One of the criteria that I have a superior handle on is my thesis it is very clear and to the point. One

of the criteria that is competent is my documentation style. I have all the in work citations but there

are many errors with the grammar and placement of the citations. I believe i will easily be able to fix

these before i turn in my final draft. On of the areas that my paper is weak on is the grammar and

formatting. I have several grammar and wording issues.  

Essay Rubric Evaluation

By Nora Hixson

-My thesis I think would be Strong, but not Superior. I think this would be because The people who reviewed my rough drafts were able to find two Freaking Points instead of just having one clear one.

 -I think my Clarity/Coherence would also be a Strong because I do have a few run-on sentences and sometimes my paragraphs don't really flow together.

-For Use of Sources I think I would be either a Strong or a Competent because I have not used nearly enough of them in my rough drafts and sometimes I will use them incorrectly in my writing.

Reviewing Essays In-Class:

By Sarah Moore

Three things I improved:

• I took into account the feedback my partner Nora wrote, which was rewording the awkward sentences, taking out ideas that didn't match my thesis, and adding support ideas.
• I rewrote my introduction, added more to my first body paragraph, and wrote the second body paragraph, as well as added (some scrambled) points to follow in each of my paragraphs for when I next edit it.
• I found and cited several more sources and incorporated them especially in my second body paragraph. 

Three things my partner improved on: Nora Hixson

• She added a bunch more detail to all of her paragraphs--I definitely saw an increase in size.
• At the end of each paragraph, I could tell what her points were much clearer than I could've before; I can tell she spent time on evaluating what she really wanted each paragraph to say.
• Particularly in the second body paragraph, she uses a positive amount of ethos. 

Improvements on rough Draft for research essays.

By Sarah Daly

     The essay that i reviewed was about how pet ownership and therapy animals improve health.

 Since i read this essay on Tuesday she improved her conclusion to include her stronger points of her

essay. She is still waiting to hear back from a few of her expert sources but her other facts are well

implemented into her essay for smooth and well places facts. This essay also has a large work cited

page and many valid and creditable source that have enhanced her thesis.

    Some of the improvements towards my essay is that I completed my counterargument and then

also my counter to my counterargument. I also tried to beef up my introduction to make it more

engaging. I also had someone else edit my paper and give me feed back with my spelling and word

chose.

In-Class Essay Review

By Nora Hixson

Ways I improved: 

1. My body paragraphs were not at all complete, so I turned them from being one sentence each to almost all of them being long paragraphs.

2. I started using my sources and citations to back up my claims and to make them more specific.

3. I tried to re-word all of my awkward sentences and made them sound more professional and clear.

Ways my partner improved: Sarah Moore

1. She took my feedback into consideration and re-worded some of her sentences.

2. She added more sources and information into her arguments and added citations.

3. She also explained the difficult terms and ideas more thoroughly and made them easier to understand.  

Reading Response: Chapter 17

By Nora Hixson


Personal Response: This chapter was very useful to me because it talked about how to properly use sources in your writing. It focused on the different ways to integrate the support into your writing, like paraphrasing, summarizing, quoting, and synthesizing. I think these are all very useful, especially as we work on our research papers in class.

Professional Response: I think the most important part of this chapter was the lay out of all different forms of plagiarism and how to avoid them. It gave guidelines for the best ways to avoid it, as well as examples of the most common mistakes that end up in plagiarism. I will definitely be using this chapter as we continue to work on our research papers.

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