Research essay Revision
By Sarah Daly
One of the criteria that I have a superior handle on is my thesis it is very clear and to the point. One
of the criteria that is competent is my documentation style. I have all the in work citations but there
are many errors with the grammar and placement of the citations. I believe i will easily be able to fix
these before i turn in my final draft. On of the areas that my paper is weak on is the grammar and
formatting. I have several grammar and wording issues.
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Showing posts with label sarah holzmeister. Show all posts
Tuesday, November 17, 2015
Tuesday, November 10, 2015
Chapter 17 Reading Response.
By Sarah Daly
Integrating Sources and Avoiding Plagiarism
Professional Response
I think this is a very good chapter when writing a paper. It makes the point that you want to paraphrase and summarize more then have direct quotes. It helps the paper flow better and helps you get your point across in your own words. Plagiarism usually occurs because of carelessness or poor time management. It could be either intentional or unintentional.
Personal Response
I think this is an important chapter. It gives good tips on including paraphrasing, summaries, or direct quotes. I find it easier and clearing when i read a paper to have the author summaries or paraphrase their sources rather then directly quote. It helps the paper flow better and keeps the same tone. The part of plagiarism always makes me nervous. I don't trust myself to cite my sources correctly all the time even if my intent isn't to copy someone else's work.
By Sarah Daly
Integrating Sources and Avoiding Plagiarism
Professional Response
I think this is a very good chapter when writing a paper. It makes the point that you want to paraphrase and summarize more then have direct quotes. It helps the paper flow better and helps you get your point across in your own words. Plagiarism usually occurs because of carelessness or poor time management. It could be either intentional or unintentional.
Personal Response
I think this is an important chapter. It gives good tips on including paraphrasing, summaries, or direct quotes. I find it easier and clearing when i read a paper to have the author summaries or paraphrase their sources rather then directly quote. It helps the paper flow better and keeps the same tone. The part of plagiarism always makes me nervous. I don't trust myself to cite my sources correctly all the time even if my intent isn't to copy someone else's work.
Monday, November 2, 2015
Chapter 16 Reading response.
By Sarah Daly
Professional Response. In this chapter it explains the different resources that are available the explains the benefits and the disadvantages of using them. They talk about the importance of using un bias and creditable sources. They speak highly of databases and school libraries due to the filtering of creditable material that they allow in. especially compared to the Internet in which you have to be very careful about the integrity of the material.
Personal Response: I feel like this chapter is a very good summary of what has been gone over in class this semester in regards to finding good and accurate sources that can enhance the papers we are writing. i found the part about Evaluating sources very helpful. Determining if the source is authoritative, accurate, objective, current, and comprehensive are great ways to narrow down a good source.
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Tuesday, October 20, 2015
Grammer Video: They're, Their, and There
Music Credit:
"Elevator Music Part 57." YouTube. N.p., n.d. Web. 20 Oct. 2015.
"Elevator Music Part 56." YouTube. N.p., n.d. Web. 20 Oct. 2015.
Sunday, October 11, 2015
Research Resources
My first impressions of this site is that it is laid out well. It is well organized and easy to navigate. The information was basic and to the point. There is no authors found on this page. The writer(s) writes mainly opinions due to the lack of evidence on the topic of the Sasquatch. He gives a description of the Sasquatch and also talks about the habitat and how the Oregon government is trying to protect it.
When i chose this website i did so because it had a .org URL. This means it is a government site. I thought it would have reliable information and facts. I think since it was a government site the information was put in the form of opinions.
The Sasquatch has many different names from different cultures; Big Foot, Ape Man, Kushtaka, the Yeti. Although it has many different names the descriptions are very similar. "Sasquatch, most commonly found in the Pacific Northwest, is usually described as a bipedal ape-like creature, significantly larger than an average man, and is completely covered in dark brown or reddish hair." (Oregon Wild) There has been sighting of this creature all around the world.
When i looked on the EBSCO database i found an article based on the legends of Bigfoot and Sasquatch. The article is very logical and fact based. The authors purspose of this article was to lay out the facts both for and against the existence of the Sasquatch. This article seems to be well written and comes from a more skeptical point of view.
Bindernagel, John. North Americans Great Apes (1998) Electronic.
"Sasquatch"- Oregon Wild. Electronic. 2015. http://www.oregonwild.org/wildlife/sasquatch
By Sarah Holzmeister
10/10/15
My first impressions of this site is that it is laid out well. It is well organized and easy to navigate. The information was basic and to the point. There is no authors found on this page. The writer(s) writes mainly opinions due to the lack of evidence on the topic of the Sasquatch. He gives a description of the Sasquatch and also talks about the habitat and how the Oregon government is trying to protect it.
When i chose this website i did so because it had a .org URL. This means it is a government site. I thought it would have reliable information and facts. I think since it was a government site the information was put in the form of opinions.
The Sasquatch has many different names from different cultures; Big Foot, Ape Man, Kushtaka, the Yeti. Although it has many different names the descriptions are very similar. "Sasquatch, most commonly found in the Pacific Northwest, is usually described as a bipedal ape-like creature, significantly larger than an average man, and is completely covered in dark brown or reddish hair." (Oregon Wild) There has been sighting of this creature all around the world.
When i looked on the EBSCO database i found an article based on the legends of Bigfoot and Sasquatch. The article is very logical and fact based. The authors purspose of this article was to lay out the facts both for and against the existence of the Sasquatch. This article seems to be well written and comes from a more skeptical point of view.
Bindernagel, John. North Americans Great Apes (1998) Electronic.
"Sasquatch"- Oregon Wild. Electronic. 2015. http://www.oregonwild.org/wildlife/sasquatch
By Sarah Holzmeister
10/10/15
Monday, October 5, 2015
Chapter 14 Reading responds.
By Sarah Holzmeister
Professional responds: In my professional opinion I like that the Argumentation essay is based on facts and not emotion. I also like that they tell you to include the argument against your point and use that to make more valid arguments towards your point.
Personal opinion: I didn't know that their is a difference between persuasive essays and Argumentation essays. I think i will like Argumentation essays more because the are heavier on the facts and not opinion.
By Sarah Holzmeister
Professional responds: In my professional opinion I like that the Argumentation essay is based on facts and not emotion. I also like that they tell you to include the argument against your point and use that to make more valid arguments towards your point.
Personal opinion: I didn't know that their is a difference between persuasive essays and Argumentation essays. I think i will like Argumentation essays more because the are heavier on the facts and not opinion.
Thursday, September 17, 2015
Outline For Amin's Essay!
Thesis statement : Reading teen magazines is stunting growth and development of teenagers and is setting up unattainable standards for them to live by that are leading to mental and physical illness.
Support one: These magazines set up unrealistic expectations of body image.
Support two: These magazines also give young people a black and white view of what it is to be a valuable member of of society in terms of careers and physical gain.
Support three: Youth are very impressionable in these teenage and early adult years they are very vulnerable to outside pressures and already have an unrealistic view of the world.
Conclusions Due to the unrealistic expectations given by these magazines it causes feelings of inadequacy which then lead to depression and feelings of hopelessness.
Sarah Holzmeister
Thesis statement : Reading teen magazines is stunting growth and development of teenagers and is setting up unattainable standards for them to live by that are leading to mental and physical illness.
Support one: These magazines set up unrealistic expectations of body image.
Support two: These magazines also give young people a black and white view of what it is to be a valuable member of of society in terms of careers and physical gain.
Support three: Youth are very impressionable in these teenage and early adult years they are very vulnerable to outside pressures and already have an unrealistic view of the world.
Conclusions Due to the unrealistic expectations given by these magazines it causes feelings of inadequacy which then lead to depression and feelings of hopelessness.
Sarah Holzmeister
Fallacies: Personal Attack
Personal Attack:
This fallacy means that the author is attacking another person for what they said or believe instead of attacking the idea itself. The attack is directed towards there character instead of being towards the issue or point being made.
How to Avoid: Keep your bias about the other person to yourself. Attack their opinions, not them.
This fallacy means that the author is attacking another person for what they said or believe instead of attacking the idea itself. The attack is directed towards there character instead of being towards the issue or point being made.
How to Avoid: Keep your bias about the other person to yourself. Attack their opinions, not them.
Wednesday, September 16, 2015
Tuesday, September 15, 2015
Just Walk on By by Brent Staples
Chapter 8: Just Walk On By
Comprehension:
1.Because she saw herself as a potential victim of what she thought he was, as well as a victim to the ignorant assumptions of what America thought African Americans were.
2. It was Staples realization that he had the power to change the atmosphere in the space around him.
3. Insomnia.
4. The obsession with the power to intimidate. Young, poor, and powerless men crave the control that can come with power.
5. Moved with care, stayed in the shadows, avoided nervous people, let people walk ahead of him, and whistled classical tunes.
Purpose and Audience:
Thesis: "It was in the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know that unwieldy inheritance I'd come into-the ability to alter public space in ugly ways." (page 239)
2. He uses a combination of logic and emotion, and his strategy worked because it could hit you on different levels and gave the reader empathy of what Staples was experiencing.
3. He seems to assume that the audience has prejudice against African American people. He challenges that thinking with his side of the story and how it makes him feel to see people basically run away from him.
4. His intent is to hook the reader to want to know more, makes them wonder if he's dangerous, etc.
Style and Structure:
1. Staples mentions Podhoretz to have more credibility and support. Podhoretz grew up in fear of black men, which enforces Staples' point that most Americans are prejudice.
2. It was the best introduction, I don't see how it could've been better.
3. Since there are twenty or more examples, all direct in what he's trying to say and making a solid point for him, there is enough support. Some examples that could be more convincing would be some studies, or statistics.
4. His order was perfect for presenting his argument, and even if the examples had been in a different order, the paper still would've been just as effective.
5. Assassin, bandit, bully, mobster, criminal, gangster, goon, gunman, hooligan, murderer, rioter, rowdy, troublemaker, delinquent, gorilla, hood, killer, punk, ruffian, gang member, hired killer, professional killer. They absolutely differ in connotation.
Journal Entry:
Nora Hixson: In my experience, there was a time when I was in the mountains with my family for Christmas break. I was injured at the time, so when my family went out to ski, I stayed in the lodge by myself. While sitting there, an older man came up to me while getting ready to ski himself, and began asking me personal questions, such as where my family was, why I wasn't skiing, and if he could see my injury (which I had told him was my knee.) He got uncomfortably close to me during his questions, but I do not know if that was just my paranoia. After reading Staples' essay, I do not think I would've reacted any differently.
Amin Halimovic: When I was traveling back from Bosnia, at the London airport my family and I were boarding the airplane. My family is Muslim and my brother had a moon and star pendent dangling from his neck. This trip we took was shortly after 9/11 happened. We were waiting in line to board the plane as we got closer and closer to enter the plane my brother was randomly pulled aside so that they could search his carry on. I feel they did this just because we are Muslim.
Sarah Holzmeister: For the last five years I have worked with violent
male offenders as being a female in a predominantly male environment there was differently stereotypes for what i could do and what i was capable of handling as a female.
Sarah Moore: I can't recall a particular experience in my life where I was blatantly afraid of a person or perceived them as dangerous, but there were certainly times when I was younger and walking the streets alone, when I'd prefer to cross the street not at the cross-walk where lone men walked. I've always had this sense of caution, unfortunately against people who may can appear more rough (?), but after reading Ben Staples' account, my perception has changed. I want to change how I view people, ordinary people walking on the streets. Most likely they're just that, ordinary people.
Writing Workshop:
3. Staples observation is fairly accurate; we've all seen examples in our own lives that support this as well. The male upbringing comes to play when fathers teach their sons at a young age, for example when they begin grade school, to not let other children hit them, and if they do, to hit them back. What he means by the male romance statement: getting that rush from seeming more powerful by using intimidation.
Comprehension:
1.Because she saw herself as a potential victim of what she thought he was, as well as a victim to the ignorant assumptions of what America thought African Americans were.
2. It was Staples realization that he had the power to change the atmosphere in the space around him.
3. Insomnia.
4. The obsession with the power to intimidate. Young, poor, and powerless men crave the control that can come with power.
5. Moved with care, stayed in the shadows, avoided nervous people, let people walk ahead of him, and whistled classical tunes.
Purpose and Audience:
Thesis: "It was in the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know that unwieldy inheritance I'd come into-the ability to alter public space in ugly ways." (page 239)
2. He uses a combination of logic and emotion, and his strategy worked because it could hit you on different levels and gave the reader empathy of what Staples was experiencing.
3. He seems to assume that the audience has prejudice against African American people. He challenges that thinking with his side of the story and how it makes him feel to see people basically run away from him.
4. His intent is to hook the reader to want to know more, makes them wonder if he's dangerous, etc.
Style and Structure:
1. Staples mentions Podhoretz to have more credibility and support. Podhoretz grew up in fear of black men, which enforces Staples' point that most Americans are prejudice.
2. It was the best introduction, I don't see how it could've been better.
3. Since there are twenty or more examples, all direct in what he's trying to say and making a solid point for him, there is enough support. Some examples that could be more convincing would be some studies, or statistics.
4. His order was perfect for presenting his argument, and even if the examples had been in a different order, the paper still would've been just as effective.
5. Assassin, bandit, bully, mobster, criminal, gangster, goon, gunman, hooligan, murderer, rioter, rowdy, troublemaker, delinquent, gorilla, hood, killer, punk, ruffian, gang member, hired killer, professional killer. They absolutely differ in connotation.
Journal Entry:
Nora Hixson: In my experience, there was a time when I was in the mountains with my family for Christmas break. I was injured at the time, so when my family went out to ski, I stayed in the lodge by myself. While sitting there, an older man came up to me while getting ready to ski himself, and began asking me personal questions, such as where my family was, why I wasn't skiing, and if he could see my injury (which I had told him was my knee.) He got uncomfortably close to me during his questions, but I do not know if that was just my paranoia. After reading Staples' essay, I do not think I would've reacted any differently.
Amin Halimovic: When I was traveling back from Bosnia, at the London airport my family and I were boarding the airplane. My family is Muslim and my brother had a moon and star pendent dangling from his neck. This trip we took was shortly after 9/11 happened. We were waiting in line to board the plane as we got closer and closer to enter the plane my brother was randomly pulled aside so that they could search his carry on. I feel they did this just because we are Muslim.
Sarah Holzmeister: For the last five years I have worked with violent
male offenders as being a female in a predominantly male environment there was differently stereotypes for what i could do and what i was capable of handling as a female.
Sarah Moore: I can't recall a particular experience in my life where I was blatantly afraid of a person or perceived them as dangerous, but there were certainly times when I was younger and walking the streets alone, when I'd prefer to cross the street not at the cross-walk where lone men walked. I've always had this sense of caution, unfortunately against people who may can appear more rough (?), but after reading Ben Staples' account, my perception has changed. I want to change how I view people, ordinary people walking on the streets. Most likely they're just that, ordinary people.
Writing Workshop:
3. Staples observation is fairly accurate; we've all seen examples in our own lives that support this as well. The male upbringing comes to play when fathers teach their sons at a young age, for example when they begin grade school, to not let other children hit them, and if they do, to hit them back. What he means by the male romance statement: getting that rush from seeming more powerful by using intimidation.
Monday, September 14, 2015
Reading response
Chapter 8
Sarah Holzmeister
Professional Response:
I completely feel like it is necessary to give examples and if possible, statistics and facts to not only prove your point but to also allow others to understand what your point is. By offering these pieces of information it makes the writer seem more creditable and knowledgeable of the subject.
Personal Response:
I completely agree with the idea of providing exemplification when trying to express an opinion. I find it very difficult to listen to people spout off on there opinions with not reasoning or facts behind what they have to say.
Chapter 8
Sarah Holzmeister
Professional Response:
I completely feel like it is necessary to give examples and if possible, statistics and facts to not only prove your point but to also allow others to understand what your point is. By offering these pieces of information it makes the writer seem more creditable and knowledgeable of the subject.
Personal Response:
I completely agree with the idea of providing exemplification when trying to express an opinion. I find it very difficult to listen to people spout off on there opinions with not reasoning or facts behind what they have to say.
Thursday, September 3, 2015
Blog Review: whatever.scalzi.com
It was a difficult tie between blogs lifehacker.com and whatever.scalzi.com, as they both had quality content and received high ratings from the group, but in the end whatever.scalzi.com took first place for best representing the quality criteria list used for determining a good blog. The quality criteria list are things such as credibility, posts being up to date and consistent, organization, and creativity so that the blog is visually appealing. Evidently, all of these factors were found in this whatever.scalci.com. Out of the four blogs each group member reviewed, this one was superior.
The author for whatever.scalzi.com, John Scalzi, is credible as a famous science fiction writer, former president of the Science Fiction and Fantasy Writers of America, and creative consult for many science fiction television shows and video games. Because of his identity as a well-known author, the information in his blog posts are intelligent and relevant to the literature world, and he often has thoughtful insights on varying books. The blog is also organized, for example there is a small calendar on the right of Scalzi's website that shows where each post is and what day it was posted on, making it easy to navigate, and therefore user friendly. Something that the rivaling blog, lifehacker.com, lacked was the overall visual appeal and creativity. Whatever.scalzi.com has an image on nearly every post, a header image at the top of the blog which changes regularly, and Scalzi sometimes even incorporates his own photography.
Using the quality criteria that was developed in class, it was decided that whatever.scalzi.com was the ultimate choice from the four blogs that were reviewed. It's creativity, organization, consistency, and author credibility set it apart from the other three, and made it the favorite in the group. This blog was captivating, credible, and creative, and would definitely be worth reading.
By Sarah Holzmeister
Topic; Video Games and Violence
Basic points: Violence before video games.
Lack of causation between the two.
Covering up the real root of the problem.
Arguable statements:
Although some people believe that Video games are the reason for school shooting the amount of shooting has actually dropped dramatically in the last decade.
You can no more truthfully say video games cause violence than you can say that playing video games caused tooth decay.
When we stop blaming video games for the violent acts some people commit we can start getting to the real cause of violence and try to put an end to it.
Top choice.
Although some people believe that Video games are the reason for school shooting the amount of shooting has actually dropped dramatically in the last decade.
Topic; Video Games and Violence
Basic points: Violence before video games.
Lack of causation between the two.
Covering up the real root of the problem.
Arguable statements:
Although some people believe that Video games are the reason for school shooting the amount of shooting has actually dropped dramatically in the last decade.
You can no more truthfully say video games cause violence than you can say that playing video games caused tooth decay.
When we stop blaming video games for the violent acts some people commit we can start getting to the real cause of violence and try to put an end to it.
Top choice.
Although some people believe that Video games are the reason for school shooting the amount of shooting has actually dropped dramatically in the last decade.
Blog Ratings
Whatever.scalzi.com
Sarah Moore gives this blog a 9, because it has everything but diverse topics. It was mostly focused on book reviews, as the author is a book author himself, there wasn't a lot of varying content.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 7, because although it's creative and organized, it lacks variety.
Nora Hixson gives this blog an 8, because it lacks current events.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog an 8 because he posts very frequently and has many interesting blog posts about whatever.
Mental Floss
Sarah Moore gives this blog a 6, because there were very current topics, but it lacked organization and easy accessibility.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 7, because everything seems interesting and diverse, it's just hard to get to.
Nora Hixson gives this blog a 6, because it was ridiculously hard to find specific topics to read about.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog a 6 because even though the blog is creative and has a lot of pictures it is just hard to navigate.
Lifehacker
Sarah Moore gives this blog an 8 because it had a little bit of everything, the topics were useful for everyday life, maybe could be a little more visually appealing but otherwise it's very good.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog an 8 because of the consistence of the posting and the quality of the content. It lacks humor and doesn't pull the reader in.
Nora Hixson gives this blog an 8 because it seemed to have current topics as well as diversity, and it seemed easy to navigate and read.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog an 8 because the blog is organized and easy to follow, the blog posts are also very appealing to me.
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Sarah Moore gives this blog a 5 because the posts were based more on her opinions only, and the content is a little dry and hard to relate to.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 4 because of the lack of credibility and isn't visually stimulating.
Nora Hixson gives this blog a 5 because the content was dry and unappealing as well as mostly being just based on her views.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog a 5 because the author does post a lot but the things she posts about do not draw my attention to her posts. It is somewhat boring to me.
Sarah Moore gives this blog a 9, because it has everything but diverse topics. It was mostly focused on book reviews, as the author is a book author himself, there wasn't a lot of varying content.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 7, because although it's creative and organized, it lacks variety.
Nora Hixson gives this blog an 8, because it lacks current events.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog an 8 because he posts very frequently and has many interesting blog posts about whatever.
Mental Floss
Sarah Moore gives this blog a 6, because there were very current topics, but it lacked organization and easy accessibility.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 7, because everything seems interesting and diverse, it's just hard to get to.
Nora Hixson gives this blog a 6, because it was ridiculously hard to find specific topics to read about.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog a 6 because even though the blog is creative and has a lot of pictures it is just hard to navigate.
Lifehacker
Sarah Moore gives this blog an 8 because it had a little bit of everything, the topics were useful for everyday life, maybe could be a little more visually appealing but otherwise it's very good.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog an 8 because of the consistence of the posting and the quality of the content. It lacks humor and doesn't pull the reader in.
Nora Hixson gives this blog an 8 because it seemed to have current topics as well as diversity, and it seemed easy to navigate and read.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog an 8 because the blog is organized and easy to follow, the blog posts are also very appealing to me.
Hot Chicks Dig Smart Men
Sarah Moore gives this blog a 5 because the posts were based more on her opinions only, and the content is a little dry and hard to relate to.
Sarah Holzmeister gives this blog a 4 because of the lack of credibility and isn't visually stimulating.
Nora Hixson gives this blog a 5 because the content was dry and unappealing as well as mostly being just based on her views.
Amin Halimovic gives this blog a 5 because the author does post a lot but the things she posts about do not draw my attention to her posts. It is somewhat boring to me.
Tuesday, September 1, 2015
Thesis statement “The E-blurt like so many other forms of communication
is about power.”
Supporting bits-
- I am busier then you hence I am more powerful than you.
- Hip for spelling errors more powerful for them.
- Reminding people that you’re the boss by making them work it out.
Counter Argument
1.
Legal implications for subpoenaed emails. ( not
professional)
Conclusion “Which only confirms what I’ve always felt about
power; the people that really understand it doesn’t say anything at all.”
Sunday, August 30, 2015
Chapter 3 reading response.
By Sarah Holzmeister
August 30/2015
Personal Response:
As I read this chapter it was very comforting that this material seems somewhat familiar. It has been quiet some time since i have taken an English class. As i read this chapter it was nice to see that not much has changed. I found it helpful the format they presented the examples and samples.
Professional Reaction:
In this chapter it explains the format in which an essay needs to be written. It gives the overall layout of an essay as well as specific points and formats for each piece of the essay. The writers provide examples of several different ways of starting and finishing paragraphs to best get your point across. They were very through on explaining how the different parts of the whole fit together.
Image from crimestoppersqld.au
August 30/2015
Personal Response:
As I read this chapter it was very comforting that this material seems somewhat familiar. It has been quiet some time since i have taken an English class. As i read this chapter it was nice to see that not much has changed. I found it helpful the format they presented the examples and samples.
Professional Reaction:
In this chapter it explains the format in which an essay needs to be written. It gives the overall layout of an essay as well as specific points and formats for each piece of the essay. The writers provide examples of several different ways of starting and finishing paragraphs to best get your point across. They were very through on explaining how the different parts of the whole fit together.
Saturday, August 29, 2015
Let Steroids into the Hall of Fame
Written by Zev Chafets
Q. What is the writer’s general subject?
A. The general subject in this essay is the epidemic of steroid
use in the baseball hall of fame and how, whether the public likes it or not, “chemical
enhancement is here to stay.” (22 Chafets)
Q. What is the writer’s main point?
A.That ultimately steroids are inevitably going to be used by athletes,
especially in baseball, and even substances like
steroids are already being used by the youth.
Q. What are the writer’s key supporting points?
A. “Purists say that steroids alter the game. But since the Hall
opened its doors, baseball has never stopped changing”. (22, Kirszner ~ Mandell)
One of the key points Chafets makes in his essay (above) is that
the game of baseball was always bound to change; it was never supposed to stay
constant, but be altered by things such as more protective uniforms, its
demography, the time of day the game is played at, and now, the use of
steroids.
“On any given day, the stands are packed with youngsters on
Adderall and Ritalin (stimulants used for attention deficit hyperactivity
disorder) and college students who use Provigil (an anti-narcolepsy drug) as a
study aid”. (22, Kirszner ~ Mandell)
The point given here by Chafets is that the adult baseball players
are not the only ones using drugs to enhance their performance.
Q. Does the writer seem to have a particular purpose in mind?
A. The purpose is to brace the public that enhancements like these
are going to be used regardless of their acceptance. It’s better to just get
used to them.
Q. What kind of audience is the writer addressing?
A. He seems to be addressing the general public, but probably more
in particular, the people who are skeptical or outraged by steroids use in the
Baseball Hall of Fame.
Q. What are the writer’s assumptions about the audience? About
subject?
A. The writer is assuming that the reader is against steroids, and
therefore is writing to them on how it is unavoidable and they should just
accept it. About his subject, Chafets seems to be somewhat ignorant to the
harmful effects steroids can have on a person, (examples such as depression,
liver damage, and cancer,) but is writing in a way that assumes steroids are harmless.
Q. Are the writer’s ideas consistent to your own?
A. Not really, the author has a very narrow approach to steroids.
Q. Does the writer reveal any biases?
A. The author is partial to steroids, and doesn’t agree with the
public who are against them.
Q. Do you have any knowledge that challenges the writer’s ideas?
A. The author is not taking into account the serious and destructive
effects steroids can have. Though Chafets says, “But baseball players aren’t children;
they are adults in a very stressful and competitive profession. If they want to
use anabolic steroids, or human growth hormone or bull’s testosterone, it
should be up to them”, (22, Kirszner ~ Mandell) simply because they’re adults doesn’t
mean they should make stupid decisions, such as taking steroids.
Q. Is there any information missing?
A. There isn’t much of a counter argument, or a more realistic
view of what steroids can do.
Q. Sequential or logical links missing?
A. None that could be found.
Q. Can you identify themes or ideas that also appear in other
works your have read?
Not many that could be compared to the essay.
Q. Can you identify parallels with your own experience?
A. There are several situations from our experiences that can be
compared. For example, the use of other drugs (like marijuana) will be used
whether it’s legal or not, similar to Chafets argument on steroids.
WORKS CITED
Kirszner, Laurie G, and Stephen R. Mandell. Patterns for College Writing: A Rhetorical Reader and Guide. Boston: Bedford St. Martin's, 2001. Print.
Thursday, August 27, 2015
Interview
I had the privilege of sitting down and interviewing Amin
about some of his writing habits and his experiences here at Front Range Community College. When asked
what forms of writing Amin uses most he explained that he texts and emails the
most. He also writes reports for work and will occasionally write letters and
friends and girlfriends.
He has already
taken this class but due to other conflicts he decided to drop the class. He
has had both poor and positive experiences with the teachers he has had, but feels like he has learned a lot of skills from both. Amin
has participated in many peer workshops throughout his years in school and feels comfortable with the process.
Amin
feels very comfortable with using computers. He uses computers at work with several
different programs to help with the every day tasks for his company. Although he regularly looks at social media websites he
rarely posts to them. Amin has been at Front Range Community College for a year and a half. He is familiar
with Front Range Community College library although he usually will go to the public library.
Amin’s goal for this class is to pass. Some of
the foreseen problems that could be in the way of achieving his goal would be his
dislike of writing and reading. He said it is hard to get his thoughts down on
paper and managing his time. Amin decided to pursue a degree in business management.
After working as a production supervisor for Polar Bottles he feels like it is the right place
for him. He likes leading a crew and making sure his team can succeed.
Written by Sarah Holzmeister
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