Ways I improved:
1. My body paragraphs were not at all complete, so I turned them from being one sentence each to almost all of them being long paragraphs.
2. I started using my sources and citations to back up my claims and to make them more specific.
3. I tried to re-word all of my awkward sentences and made them sound more professional and clear.
Ways my partner improved: Sarah Moore
1. She took my feedback into consideration and re-worded some of her sentences.
2. She added more sources and information into her arguments and added citations.
3. She also explained the difficult terms and ideas more thoroughly and made them easier to understand.
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